Er, okay, or not! OpenID doesn't seem to be working for me right now, so I'll just post some of my thoughts here! You're writing from the POV of my three favourite characters, so yay at that first of all! And, IMHO, all of them are really IC, but at the same time you've added an interesting twist to each of them. So I'm defintiely excited to see what happens next (after the cliffhanger...)!
My possibly favourite line to date: "At least let me make you some tofu!" LOL
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Date: 2009-08-04 09:43 pm (UTC)You're writing from the POV of my three favourite characters, so yay at that first of all! And, IMHO, all of them are really IC, but at the same time you've added an interesting twist to each of them. So I'm defintiely excited to see what happens next (after the cliffhanger...)!
My possibly favourite line to date: "At least let me make you some tofu!" LOL